The order to move crackled over the radios at dawn on August 6th.
I really do hate it when articles try to be novels, it really just takes me out of it.
So they fired everything they had until the maize stopped rustling, and silence fell. Then the Ukrainians moved on.
"Should I say the maize stoppes rustling or that silence fell? I'll do both!"
The funny thing is the prose sounds like it was written by a high schooler.
Always is
they're trying hard to write it in style of a Tom Clancy fanfic
I had to look up who that was lol and I fear you’re probably right
The hellish forced attempts at immersion from people being told over and over as writers to "show, don't tell" - I won't indulge in a rant about it here, as it's off-topic anyway, but that adage and the resulting prose drives me up the wall.
It’s annoying as a university student as well because we are always lectured heavily on writing directly, not colourfully. We have to state the information outright and a penalized for flowery prose. So seeing this type of writing published just makes me frustrated. They think it adds to the immersion, but it actually does the opposite. I’m here to read an article, not Lord of the Rings. I just want the information, not a short story. It actually makes the article harder to read and get through when it’s focused on “world building” rather than the situation at hand. I wonder if it has to do with the journalists wanting to spin an inspiration narrative about Ukraine, to keep up public support.